Once again, we are honored by Patsy Middleton with 200 words exploring new beginnings from old endings. Read on, and ponder.
Encounter on a Train
© 2013, Patsy Middleton
The train pulled in to the
platform and she looked up at the station sign.
Good, she thought, five more stops—and she continued reading.
Someone sat next to her. She
didn’t have to look up. She knew it was him, her ex-fiancĂ©.
Would he say something? Should
she say something?
The old magnetic pull was there
and her heart began to quicken.
He was looking at her. She could
feel it.
She stared at the words on the
page and they danced in front of her eyes.
She should say hello, at least, she
thought.
No, he should say hello. He was
such a stickler for manners—that was why they had split up: her lack of
knowledge of his cultural protocol. But if he had really loved her, that
wouldn’t have mattered. She had seen the years ahead: she always treading on
eggshells, trying not to displease him. He always finding fault.
No, she was right not to marry
him.
He had been so hurt. His sister
said he cried. She had felt numb.
The journey between stations
lasted an age.
The train slowed, stopped. He got
out.
Had it really been him or had she
imagined it?
Slainte!
Beautiful. I most sincerely enjoyed this piece and am looking forward to more. Thank you, Patsy Middleton, for submitting this little story to the challenge. What a lovely thing to share.
ReplyDeleteElizabeth Rowan Keith
This was fantastic, in style and substance. That ending is so powerful; terrific work!
ReplyDeleteYou packed a lot into 200 words. Very well done. Now I'm left wondering too...
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